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Posted by Adam
2. hotshh! Vs. 16. Jack The Ripper

10 Line Minimum - 16 Line Maximum

Please Check-In by Wednesday, and Drop your verse by Friday.

Good Luck to both of you..

Posted by Grave Digger
I'LL FUCKING KILL YOU BITCH.. oh ya, and good luck :thumbup:

Checkers
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King me

Posted by Grave Digger
Word, and checking in for my homie hotshh!! good night hoes, im drunk

Posted by N.Tavarez
hahaha. good luck jack

Posted by N.Tavarez
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME





*I know Marv used a canadian Sun line, this isnt the same, mine just means u going home like steve nash and the suns...voters GET the difference
*also JTR's title is " jack rips whores" and his other alias is " Darth Vader"
WE'RE BOTH IN THE SAME CREW, WE'RE BOTH DOPE, D/R'S STAY AWAY

Posted by Grave Digger
**Royale is a toilet paper brand
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We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in

(peep the wordplay)

Posted by eph
hotshh!
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
open was too polite...decent
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
haha. Fiya
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
ha, ok...step it up
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
so so, flow was juggled
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
good
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
haha, another hit
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
dope bar
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
closing with this line was ite, could have been great

*this verse for the most part was fire. real good punches,
the personals came in every line. shit was hot. the comdey
was a plus, had my chuckle a few times. word. umm real
hot verse, the flow was juggled in a line or two. but again
for the most part, ya verse was FIYA... 91%

Jack The Ripper

We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
good open, not special
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
bar wasnt bad, i just didnt like it
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
oxymoron = most used punch-word, but still a good bar
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
ite, again...nothin special
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
haha, good
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
new concept, was that relavent though?[b]
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
[b]confidence is good

Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
haha, ite...good shit

*you worked completely different than hotshh! here. ya
verse was good. i liked the confidence as well.punches
were hot, but you had a little more filler than hotshh!.
the more personals you can intertwine with ya punches
the better. and thats the tie breaker here. good read,
especially the closuer...good shit. but my vote still goes
to hotssh! for less fill and more comdey....88%


vote: hotshh!

good shit yall & good luck.

Posted by King Solo
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
6...this was an ok punch, i wasn't really feelin the setup with the whole you takin him out with all the low blows and shit, loads of people have dropped shit like that!!
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
7...LMAO!!! comedy lines are cool!!! the whole teeth duck idea was nice and it went with the setup well so props on that!!
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
8...DOPE!!!! the wordplay in this punch was dope as fuck with the whole Obi Won shit, you played nicely off his vader alias with the star wars concept!!!
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
6...decent personal, a nice punch although i think that the whole bar was kinda basic and cud've been better with some dope wordplay!!!
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
6...yeah, not all that similar to Marv's punch in fact, but still i wasn't feelin it and it lacked really in comparison to ya earlier punches!!
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
6...played concept, but ya made it funny with the wedding bands piece!!
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
7...DAMN!!! playin off his user title like that was dope and nuthin too basic with the rhymin either!!
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME
5...NO!!! worst part of ya verse, the whole elevation and dentist concepts are both played, i have seen them many times before!!

OVERALL: 51/80




We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
5...not feelin the opener, i mean even with the link.....talkin about hot shit to play off his name has been done too many times, i am yet to see an original play on his name!!
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
5...callin him gay was stupid and pointless, and the whole dickridin concept is fuckin played like shit man!! i mean at least try to make it funny when ya use it!!
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
7...LOL!!! a nice line at last, the oxymoron part was dope, although i feel the setup was kinda basic!!
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
7...NICE!!! a good play off of his user title and with the dope wordplay it made a nice punch altogether!!
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
6...nice punch, the setup was pretty average but the J-Kidd shit was nice!!
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
8...DAMN!!! LMFAO!!! this was a killer line, original concept and an overall dope punch!!
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
7...nice wordplay, the marathon concept has been done a few times before but you put a new twist on it so props for that!!
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
7...good wordplay again, a nice closer, the barcode - punch it in concept was pretty nice!!!

OVERALL: 52/80


damn...that was a close battle...
both came good, although not as consistent as i expected...both had a REAL DOPE line and both had some wack lines....i thought that hotshh had it at first cuz JTR had a couple of gay lines to begin with, but he brought it together to the end with some real nice punches....hotshh had some nice punches, just not as hard hittin as jack and he had that gay line at the end.........

no hate...

VOTE = Jack The Ripper

Posted by Sik Wit It
hotshh!
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
—4, not feelin this opener
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
—6, average
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
—4, nope
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
—5, decent
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
—5, decent
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
—6, pretty decent
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
—7, nice
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
—4, weak closer

Overall – 41/80

Jack The Ripper
We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
—6, average opener
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
—4, weak..
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
—6, bar was good
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
—5, decent
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
—4, weak
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
—7, nice
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
—5, decent
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
—5, closer was aight here

Overall – 42/80

Winner – Jack The Ripper

Posted by Tremendous
[uHotshh[/u]
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
ok
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
This joke is played when casing niggas
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
eh..
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends
Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
good
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
ok
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
nope
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
nice
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
good



Jack The Ripper

We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
eh..
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJy got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
weak
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
weak
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
nice
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
good
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
weak
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
weak
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
weak


Vote = Jack the Ripper

Posted by N.Tavarez
good battle, but wtf with tremendous saying 5 lines of jacks were weak, and still giving him the win

rate the punches nucca!!

good shit JTF

Posted by J. Luth
lol Trem ain't even in the VC, I don't think

Posted by €ΠŞ€
Rippin da Jacker, with elbows and low blows below the Waist Kid
Im takin Head out da game quicka than pitchers wit Loaded Bases
^^nice opener
He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
^^ive seen this concept lots... but it relevent so koo...
Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
^^didnt connect great, good concept but wordin was off here
See Headgames was lame... his status couldnt pay Dividends

Came back a 'new man', this is just The Bitch in him Revisiting
^^nah, wasnt feelin this line hot...sorry homie
Final Four is like the NBA playoffs, stayed long but Leave Fast
So I'm sending "Sun" home for the summer, Like Steve Nash*
^^koo............................
Or maybe I'll lose....... and Jack'll prove to be the Better Man
With all those D/R's, ya ass gets fingered like Wedding Bands!
^^ohh, best bar so far....very relevent..lol..
"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
^^nice..........................
Your elevation proves you only stood up to get Knocked Down
So U'd have to a go to da dentist, just to say u got "Crowned"
.................................................. ......................King ME
.nice closer.........good verse.
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We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
^^funny stuff..
Ya, hot is fucking gay, so i'll pound your chest like fucking apes
Cuz MaRVJay got hotshit over his dick like sweaty prison rapes
^^nah homie
He's not respected, falls short to legend, dawg is frowned upon
Cuz saying the best look up to shit... is defined as an oxymoron
^^this was koo
Come on son, "Da medicine man" is really wack, I been watching
Give hotshh! a taste of his medicine and lower his coffin(coughin)
^^decent concept...bit to wordy
Your not pimp, and not much of a baller either, ya skills is ass
Cuz hot couldn't catch a dime... if J-kidd threw him the pass
^^eh...personally wasnt feelin it
Lack the sex-drive, not really a stud, hotshh! man please behave
Cuz the only time he's fucking bitches dead
...is after he's dug up their grave
^^ok......good concept
C'mon kid, a loss in the final four again, lemme hand you a clue
Your like last place marathon finishers
...you've come so far just to lose
^^ok
Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
^^decent
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not voting, :thumbup:

Posted by headgames
3-1 me if tremendous counts, otherwise 2-1

We got a battle here fellas

Posted by Adam
Only 2-1, Tremndous is not on the voting council..

Posted by headgames
weerdness, upping them

Posted by sdizzle
We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away

^ only good line

wow hot came ass X 200000000

v/ the guy who wasn't hot...

Posted by Master Minded
3-1............ upping yo yo

Posted by High-Dro
pretty sure it's 2-1

Posted by Master Minded
King Solo - Me
Skriptz - Me
Sdizzle - Me
Eph - hotshh!

3-1 bro

Posted by E.C
ight i aint gonna have time to vote properly so ill just break uit down as easy as i can..

hotshh!

i thought u had some real dope lines in there... good punches decent concepts and some good personals... other lines wernt as hard hitting or not as effective in other words as the other ones here is some lines i liked anyway:

He's run his mouth in every thread, talking shit like He's Tough
By now his breath stink so much,when he speaks his Teeth Duck
^^ this line was dope... not played and very effective

Not playing HEADGAMES but my "jedi mind trick'll" Spark Haters
O hh, he cant BI the WON ......... his alias is DARTH VADER!
^^ good concept went off star wars and came off wit a dope personal

here are saome lines i didn't like:

"Back to ya roots"? must be spitting from a womb dats Polluted
Gimme your Titles, cuz "All whores get ripped"... Jack Included
^^ this was ok but i wasn't really feeling it as much as the others...

overall im gonna gvie you 86/100

Jack the ripper:

ight i felt u had a real strong verse... good punches not played punches... good structure and flow i didn't think u had one shit punch they were all dope here is 1 bar i liked:


We prism you to lose when korv takes shape, and that aint sway
Cuz closest hotshit comes to royale is when he gets wiped away
^^ this was real dope lol... good wordplay aswell

here is 1 bar i didn't like:

Hots my dawg, but when tempers flare, i'm bound to commit a sin
Grab your kneck, treat your face like a bar-code and punch it in
^^ kinda played but it was alright..

overall imma give you 88/100

this is hard to call becuz both of them had a real good verse but i think imma give it to Jack coz he stayed more concistant and had better wordplay in his verses... pzz

v/ jack

Posted by headgames
word, I knew this one was gonna be close, good battle yo', 4-1 me..

I wish there was the 4-1 k.o. rule :thumbup:

Posted by High-Dro
i sincerely hope that sdizzle's vote doesnt count

Posted by headgames
.................. it was an honest vote

Posted by headgames
.................. 3-1, or 4-1

wt/v

upping yoyo