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Posted by J. Luth
Nature's Calling

‘Cross the shining sea
A tall tower stood trembling in time
Masked in a shade of autumn
Her majesty’s defense in line
Rain reduced it to crumbling
And alas it did collapse
Escaping it’s cluttered cage
To relieve himself at last

Posted by Also Known.
Is that a poem about taking a shit?

Posted by J. Luth
^ROFL nahh. You def closest one to get it tho man.

Read it again and tell me what you think.

First line hints location
Third line hints color
Fourth line hints location and possibly place ~_~

then last line hints that it's a person

tell me what you think after that. thanks for the input tho man. It's good to see others' interpretation of your work.

this my first poem due for my creative writing class

Posted by
Rain is a poor excuse. Your explanation was terrible.

The poem is best without an explanation, & the last two lines were boring and bland. I tried to piece it all together but it was kinda meh at the end. Sorry.

However I'm sure this qualifies as a shortly above average poem, depending on your creative writing class, afterall, people have taste for even the shortest and quickest poems. This was short, yet medium to slow.

Oh, and you had absolutely no tone.

peace.

Posted by J. Luth
lol it's cool to me. This is my first poem, I don't expect to be shakespeare after my first attempt at a poem.

and i made it to be a poem about a guard in buckingham palace. Who tried fighting the urge to go pee, but finally gave in. ~_~

Posted by In-Vision
Quote:
Originally Posted by 2v
Rain is a poor excuse. Your explanation was terrible.

The poem is best without an explanation, & the last two lines were boring and bland. I tried to piece it all together but it was kinda meh at the end. Sorry.

However I'm sure this qualifies as a shortly above average poem, depending on your creative writing class, afterall, people have taste for even the shortest and quickest poems. This was short, yet medium to slow.

Oh, and you had absolutely no tone.

peace.


lmao @ the idea of you being a reasonable judge of good poetry.

for what this was, it was good. If it isn't...then all of my college professors have lied to me about everything and my degree will be a lot less valuable then you're godly ammount of knowledge of written art that you've aquired from spending so much time on a computer...and so little time in a classroom where those kinds of things are taught....i bet you could start a stem-cell lab in your basement if you could find the "how to" guide on wikipedia...couldn't you?


you already know how i feel sp....keep up...shit is good.

Posted by
If your college professors weren't lying then they should have told you that poetry is subjective and with or without a point, the professor is to decide what he or she truly expects from the poetry. Some expect a large vocabulary with almost no sense behind the words.

With that said, poetry is subjective, and that makes every reader's opinion viable, while at the same time, every poem is also good.

so yeah, shit is good, good is good, bad is good, complex is good, up, down, satan, god, black, white, is all good, in Poetry.


but hehhhhhh reasonable judge lots of time on the computer

Posted by In-Vision
Quote:
Originally Posted by 2v
If your college professors weren't lying then they should have told you that poetry is subjective and with or without a point, the professor is to decide what he or she truly expects from the poetry. Some expect a large vocabulary with almost no sense behind the words.

With that said, poetry is subjective, and that makes every reader's opinion viable, while at the same time, every poem is also good.

so yeah, shit is good, good is good, bad is good, complex is good, up, down, satan, god, black, white, is all good, in Poetry.


but hehhhhhh reasonable judge lots of time on the computer



lmao....not only do you not know what you're talking about when it comes to what professors expect out of anything...but you contradict yourself by going out of your way to make a piece look like it's slightly above average...and then turn around and say that it's completely subjective...even though you're opinion wasn't made to appear like it was your opinion..it was made to look like it was a fact....just like 99% of the bullshit you post.

If you can agree that your opinion is just as subjective as anyone elses...then take the fucking time to say..."this is just how i feel...because i don't speak for anyone...and frankly...don't have a very good understanding of this sort of thing."

because you don't. even though you would like to think you do, and like others to think the same...you really don't.

Posted by
Naw dude suck my fucking cock because you're wrong.

You have this shit embedded in your head about me that makes you automatically assume shit about the things I post. Well, let it drift away, you have nut latching spirits inside. Let them seep out of your soul you faggot cunt.

Posted by In-Vision
lol...explain to me why just about everyone agrees then? explain to me why alllll these people who arn't highschool dropouts and are actually furthering their education via universities....and not via the internet...seem to all share the same opinion about you?

Posted by Cola
lol, i've learned much much more out of school than i ever did while attending school

School was just one of those places that gave you idea's to take to the next level. Like complex ideas, that you dont really ever ask yourself.

If anything, college is an experience. One that allows you to find who you are goign to be.

But, everyones different

Posted by Adam
It's blah, 'bout average.

Posted by J. Luth
LOL I like how within 2 hours, I get more replies than any other poetry thread in this forum. :love: the Kid

Posted by Adam
Generally that happens when you spam something, it's not because it's immaculate poetry.

Posted by J. Luth
aww, thanks for helping the cause adam. :love: I love you too b! Let me tickle your tummy and serve you breakfast in bed :hump:

Posted by In-Vision
Quote:
Originally Posted by Pinky
lol, i've learned much much more out of school than i ever did while attending school

School was just one of those places that gave you idea's to take to the next level. Like complex ideas, that you dont really ever ask yourself.

If anything, college is an experience. One that allows you to find who you are goign to be.

But, everyones different


of course you learn more outside...people spend more time outside of school then they do inside. My point was...2v is a fucking idiot...and hardly ever knows what he's talking about...and likes to pretend like he does.

example..2v has, on multiple occasions...expressed his opinion on what he feels college professors might be like...yet he's tried to make "factual" statements rather then admitting that it's opinion...when the truth is...he doesn't know 1 college professor...none the less....enough to have an educated guess as to how they function as teachers.

Posted by Cola
^^

lol, your example of 2v was so dead on....


rofl

Posted by Dabatos
Lol spul nice one haha.. U must have been bored bro hahaha like foreal lol.. Cool piece haha.. Liked da last line.. Feel like that everyday after I pee after a long class or longday at work haha.